I'm not too good with digital imaging as yet - unless you want psychadelic outcomes (see my gallery with the "inside of my mind" shot), but im sure if you went onto the DA forums for digital phtography someone there'll help you.
sorry for not being able to help you more. i would help if i could
well, you dont have to tell me how to come to the conclusion, just tell me what you dont like about it and i will try to come up with a remedy. you said "Do you do your own developing? a lot of the mistakes in this shot could be rectified if you did." well? what are these mistakes so i can try to rectify them? i really am looking forward to improving my art, so any help would be great!